End-of-life care choices to improve quality of life for persons with alzheimer’s disease and related dementias
an abbreviated grant proposal. I already got it back graded, but

another opportunity to increase the grade! Please see all the documents
attached to understand what needs to be improved. If any doubts, contact me!

The main aspects to be changes are:

1) connect how what I am proposing is going to really change the quality of life for
alzheimer‘s patients and related dementias and their families.

This is the biggest issue with this paper. It is not clear how everything is
connected.

The intellectual merit section needs to be changed because according to the
professor, that is not intellectual merit.

everything I wrote on the first page of the project description is intellectual merit,
so not sure how to change that.

2) make the paper more authoritative and convincing

Feel free to delete or add things to what I am proposing that you think is going to
improve the strength of the paper.

WC means word choice, when reading the comments.