SOURCES: specify where Updike mad libing you used after every time you use his mad libs, i will upload again how he does it. i will call the file “UpDike”

OTHER: here is my professor feed back about the paper, please read it very well and you will know what the paper is missing, I will also upload the paper after his comments i will call it paper with comments so please check that as well, Here is his feedback :

I like a lot of what’s happening in this draft so far, and I can really see the influences from Updike and from the Santa essays we read.

I think the biggest change that you’ll want to work on as you revise is making it less *biographical* and more *analytical*. That means you’ll want to do less just reporting the highlights of Ali’s life and more digging into how we see Ali and what seeing him that way says about us as a culture. Right now, it feels like the essay is about 70% biography, 30% analysis, and I think we want to flip those ratios in the revision.

How might you do so? Here are a couple of ideas:
-Spend more time deeply analyzing one image, such as the famous one of him standing over Liston, and use some of the techniques that Helmers & Hill use as you do. (What factors of the image make it so powerful? Why does it speak to us? How might a slightly different version speak to us less?)

-Spend more time developing precision about what, exactly he represents. You talk about persistence in one paragraph, for instance, but what *kind* of persistence? The more narrowly and precisely you can define that, the more successful and insightful the essay will be.

-Talk about the contradictions that Ali reveals (i.e. he’s a non-violent figher; he’s popular because he’s controversial). Often, I think there’s a lot of energy in the tension between seemingly incompatible things, and I think you can tap into that energy as you write about Ali.

Of course, you’ll want to make sure you cite your Updike mad libs as you revise as well. (I think you might have some of those here, but I didn’t see the citations.)

And, as you know, I’m always very happy to work on this with you in my office — just let me know when!